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If I am a cloud


If I were a cloud, I would go to a dry place and give the people there a timely rain. If I were a cloud, I would go to the desert, plant a seed, and the next heavy rain would turn the desert into a green state. If I am a cloud, I will go to Taiwan, give the children there, the next heavy snow, let them enjoy the fun of snowflakes. If I am a cloud,,,,,, teacher review: poetry has a certain theme, imagination is also rich. The little author clings to the theme and assumes that he is a cloud and will do something. It can be recognized that the little author is a kind and enthusiastic person, and all he wants to do is to help others. However, poetry also has some shortcomings, such as "I will go to arid place", "I will go to the desert", the content is somewhat repetitive, the desert is a dry place! In addition, the rhythm is not very clear, the small author should pay attention to these problems. 2009-9-15 16:57:00

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