The top ten diseases of the national middle school students

There are ten situations in which the middle school students' essays are easy to commit:

First, the observations are not refined, the glimpses of light, and even the narrative description of abstract emptiness.

A classmate wrote in "The Pond Rainscape": "There are some flowers and trees around the pond. The trees are all kinds of lush and green. The flowers are also various and colorful." The description is somewhat empty. . What trees are there in the space, what are the characteristics of the trees, and what are the flowers, and the shape and color of these flowers have not come out. Not only that, it has not yet been able to hold the word "rain". This is due to the fact that the observation is not fine.

Second, the language is dry, there is no literary talent, and the writing is not full.

For example, there is an article entitled "My Language Teacher", one of which reads: "She looks more standard, wears glasses, doesn't speak much, always laughs, I like her very much." From the grammatical point of view, there is obviously no problem, but from the point of view of the portraits of the characters, the strength and effect of reappearing the characters' voices and smiles, the language is less versatile, and it seems relatively dull, lacking vividness and expressiveness.

Third, mechanical imitation, hard-working, no innovation.

There is a written article, one of which is written like this: "Growing this little thing, the court will become the mood of the people. It will only start in the morning, come back from school, I don’t think I have to stand there for a while. "This text, except for the "Working Bi" in Ye Shengtao's "Morning Glory" was changed to "Out of School", "Xiao Li" was changed to "Small Station", and the rest of the text was almost identical. How much is this kind of hoist-like imitation, and how much difference is it from plagiarism? Of course, after seeing a good article in the newspaper and magazine, after inspiring, combined with what you have seen and heard, and writing articles in your own language, although such an article can not only have traces of "imitation", but also for beginner writing For people, it is worthy of praise. And isn't the "imitation" that puts X or Y into a math game?

Fourth, the creation of words, the application of vocabulary, it is puzzling.

For example: "My father is a teacher, and my request is very strict." "Other people are not old, saying that they must serve the people for several years." In the first sentence of the heart, "strictness", in the dictionary It is not found in the roots, it is a creation; in the second sentence, "to serve for a few more years" and to take apart the "service" is a split word.

Fifth, the words are heavy, do not re-throw, do not know how to temper the words.

For example: “There are three ways to get to the destination, namely left, middle and right. Left and right, the road is far, and the middle is the closest, so in the left, middle and right, we decided to take the middle.” Obviously There is a lot of repetition in this text, but if it can be tempered by a little processing, it will become "there are three left and right roads to the destination, the middle road is the closest, so we decided to take the middle road", then it is simple too much.

Sixth, the pursuit of "literature", pretending to be elegant, has the suspicion of sensationalism.

"The sun is up the mountain", it was very popular and very simple, but some people actually wrote it as "a red sun with a golden light shining through it, quietly exploring the face from Dongshan." Show yourself versatile.

Mr. Lu Xun has consistently advocated that the article should be easy to understand. It is necessary to "take a living vocabulary from the mouth of a living person and move it to paper." The classmates should get some inspiration from here.

Seven, before and after the touch, self-contradictory, not logical logic.

For example, "I am a very naughty child. I can say that it is such a naughty thing from small to large." Since the front has already admitted that he is a "child", how do you say "from small to big"? Therefore, there is a contradiction between the front and the back.

Eight, isolated scenes, no help, and write for the scene.

For example, there is an article about the Spring Festival, which reads: "In the morning, I went to bed together and saw the sky being gloomy. It seemed to be full of 'faces. The sun didn't know where to hide. The north wind cried. This time, The street is filled with gongs and drums, and the firecrackers are all over the sky. People are celebrating the Spring Festival, and it’s so lively!” The author is willing to write the Spring Festival’s Huandong, but at the beginning of this scene, not only can’t set off the theme, but the bull’s head is not right, but also The main purpose of the fight is coming.

Nine, shallow sings, singularity, lack of enthusiasm and bold.

For example, one of my classmates wrote in an article: "The pavilion is exceptionally deserted. When a person is tired, he sits down. At this moment, I suddenly think of a word from Li Qingzhao: 'The wind has gone to the dusty flower, day and night. Tired of combing hair. Things are people who are not doing things, and tears flow first... 'Yes, the wind is still the same, but the people are right. Thinking about it, I don’t feel the tears of the broken lines.” Indeed, In some of the students' work, shallow sings and sings are the main theme of their writing, and the thinking and intervention of the outlook on life and values ​​are difficult to face. This kind of weak morbid style should attract our attention.

Ten, contempt for punctuation, a tease in the end, and some even Wang Wen does not add punctuation.

For example, the following paragraph: "When everyone picks up the lights and reads at night, she has gone to bed, and when everyone wants to sleep, she snoring and snoring, everyone is angry, they are all trying to pinch her face." The paragraph contains at least two complete sentences, and the comma after the "snapping" should be changed to a period. We must pay attention to punctuation and let punctuation serve the article better.