autumn

When did the fall come, it seems that no one noticed it until the color of the flowers and trees faded away, and the dark yellow leaves of the trees slowly floated in the air... We realized that - autumn, it really came!

Autumn, always dreamy - the rain is falling fine, the wind is mixed with rain, the rain follows the wind... The rain gently washes the dust of the earth, and the wind gently blows the falling leaves. At dusk, the rain and the wind were light, and the sun dedicated its afterglow to the earth, so the dark yellow leaves glowed with the sun shining, as if a string of rainbows were strung. Everything is so harmonious and warm!

Autumn, always elegant - the wind is blowing softly, the dark yellow leaves will break free and sway in the sound of the leaves "sand", like a beautiful butterfly. This kind of beauty is so short, like a flash in the pan. I have not had time to appreciate it carefully and it has disappeared. I regret the beauty of this moment. It struggles to get rid of the bondage. But does it not know that the leaves will eventually return to the roots? For a moment, is this value? Perhaps this is also the spirit of autumn. If you want to surpass others and achieve extraordinary achievements, you must first eat extraordinary suffering.

Autumn is always perfect - the autumn wind is blowing the autumn rain, the autumn rain is accompanied by the autumn wind, and a beautiful "autumn map" is presented. Autumn wind, autumn rain, autumn leaves. They can't show beauty on their own. What they express is a kind of beauty, a harmonious beauty - no wind, no rain, no leaves, no leaves, no wind, no wind, no leaves, no leaves, no wind, no wind, no wind, no wind, no wind, no wind It seems boring. ......

If there are no leaves, no wind, no rain, why do we know the existence of autumn? Just as people, if they have not experienced suffering, and have not touched the sharpness of the rock wall and the gravel of the land with their own skin, why do we know our existence? Indeed, people's talents are similar. If you want to surpass others and achieve extraordinary achievements, you may have to suffer extraordinary suffering first.

Autumn, let me really appreciate its beauty.

Grade 5 of Zhenjiang Experimental School, Runzhou District, Zhenjiang, Jiangsu: Small Mushrooms for Girls

Comments: As an essay describing autumn, the children are very lively and lively. The article is very beautiful and very literary! However, for the fifth-grade essay requirements, the number of articles is less. The specific changes are as follows:

The second paragraph "In the field, the farmer uncle is bending his waist and cutting the millet, and he is very sweaty." Here you can add some dynamic factors, and combine the dynamics and the vivid atmosphere of the rice fields. You can add: "A burst of autumn wind After, the heavy millet swayed in the wind, and the rice fields rolled over Jinbo. It was so beautiful!” After that, the “tennon” was asked for a transitional sentence, such as watching the beautiful rice fields and the farmer’s unearthing scene, I can’t help I remembered that "When Wohe Day, the sweat dripped down the soil. Who knows the Chinese food, the grain is hard." This not only echoes the beautiful autumn at the end, I love autumn, but also a lot of coherence.

The third paragraph, describing the color of chrysanthemums, can be used as "purple and purple". It is recommended to adjust the order in the third paragraph to: Autumn, the trees are slowly turning yellow. You see, the phoenix tree leaves like a palm, shakes and shakes, and says goodbye to the tree mother. The maple leaf is like a stamp, the autumn is cool, and the autumn clothes are put on the mountain. Look at the grass again, a few days ago is still lush, I do not know when it quietly turned yellow, look far away, like laying a yellow carpet on the ground. However, autumn also sent us a colorful flower fairy, you see the chrysanthemum, purple, white, red ... purple, so beautiful! The autumn wind has passed, and it is really refreshing to send a chrysanthemum fragrance!

In the fourth paragraph, the fruit part can be modified with rhetoric for each type of fruit. For example, the persimmon can be changed to: the persimmon tree is full of ripe persimmons, like a red lantern hanging on the branch. It makes people feel infinitely happy and warm. Oranges: The oranges are dressed in golden clothes, occasionally embellished with green, very cute. Apple: The red apple is full of branches... and the tempting pear, everyone laughs.

Comments Teacher: Teacher Li Yiyi